Eliapedia Entry Corrections
Posted: Wed Oct 14, 2020 1:24 am
Hey there. So, since the Eliapedia can be edited (as noted when the font color bug was fixed in Ooze Horror's and Lumbercore's entries, I figured I'd put in a few corrections. Here's what I got.
Petunia: You forgot to remove the "provisional logbook entry" portion when you copy-pasted my observations on them (much of what was written for the Eliapedia were based on my personal observations and the game's story)
Shagdaw: There's an extra period at the end of the final sentence.
Spiked Squisher: The last sentence would best be rewritten as the following: The spiked squisher's body is made out of mud much like the Ground Spitter.
Ground Spitter: Given Ground Spitters are twice as big as Spiky Squishers (who are made of the same material), their weight would better be written as "49 lbs." The last sentence should be rewritten as followed: Since their body is made out of hardened mud built into a tall, cylindrical shape, Ground Spitters have little or no pain receptors.
Dumtilian: Given the Eliapedia entry of the Ooze, the final sentence of the Dumtilian's Eliapedia entry can be rewritten as the following: Their natural diet is unknown since Dumtillians weren't found outside the sewers; however, they have eaten escaping pools of Ooze, preventing them from polluting the environment.
Ooze: The "however" in the first sentence should be removed.
Rafflesia: The last sentence should be rewritten like so: Their bite force allows rafflesias to pierce through skin and possibly break bones in unprotected humans.
Stalagmite: Given their official name, all remaining instances of the word "stalker" can be removed.
Scorpee: Given the Eliapedia entries are organized by when monsters first appeared in-game, the Scorpee's entry should be placed after the Batling's. This statement would be added in order to explain why they let players ride them.: "Mysteriously, the Scorpee allows people to ride it. This could be the result of the evolution of domestication on Eliatopia or as a result of the teachings of Moonchyllus and her twelve-goddess pantheon."
Lumbercore: The semicolon in front of "Consciousness Research Facility" should be removed.
So yeah, there's that.
Petunia: You forgot to remove the "provisional logbook entry" portion when you copy-pasted my observations on them (much of what was written for the Eliapedia were based on my personal observations and the game's story)
Shagdaw: There's an extra period at the end of the final sentence.
Spiked Squisher: The last sentence would best be rewritten as the following: The spiked squisher's body is made out of mud much like the Ground Spitter.
Ground Spitter: Given Ground Spitters are twice as big as Spiky Squishers (who are made of the same material), their weight would better be written as "49 lbs." The last sentence should be rewritten as followed: Since their body is made out of hardened mud built into a tall, cylindrical shape, Ground Spitters have little or no pain receptors.
Dumtilian: Given the Eliapedia entry of the Ooze, the final sentence of the Dumtilian's Eliapedia entry can be rewritten as the following: Their natural diet is unknown since Dumtillians weren't found outside the sewers; however, they have eaten escaping pools of Ooze, preventing them from polluting the environment.
Ooze: The "however" in the first sentence should be removed.
Rafflesia: The last sentence should be rewritten like so: Their bite force allows rafflesias to pierce through skin and possibly break bones in unprotected humans.
Stalagmite: Given their official name, all remaining instances of the word "stalker" can be removed.
Scorpee: Given the Eliapedia entries are organized by when monsters first appeared in-game, the Scorpee's entry should be placed after the Batling's. This statement would be added in order to explain why they let players ride them.: "Mysteriously, the Scorpee allows people to ride it. This could be the result of the evolution of domestication on Eliatopia or as a result of the teachings of Moonchyllus and her twelve-goddess pantheon."
Lumbercore: The semicolon in front of "Consciousness Research Facility" should be removed.
So yeah, there's that.